tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post2742025095837904558..comments2023-12-19T00:27:40.453-10:00Comments on .: Faux pasMcGuirehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03095242258892600138noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-48960457707453140232009-08-09T00:31:16.611-10:002009-08-09T00:31:16.611-10:00Soon you'll have enough for a whole chair-them...Soon you'll have enough for a whole chair-themed collection...<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-43245798108338808072009-08-04T23:45:09.253-10:002009-08-04T23:45:09.253-10:00strangely disembodied Ivor Cutleresque piece: McGu...strangely disembodied Ivor Cutleresque piece: McGuire in usual good form.Hugh McMillanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05353561780315527799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-43713570956421698482009-08-04T09:18:46.046-10:002009-08-04T09:18:46.046-10:00sorry rachil. thought youd spelt yer ain name wron...sorry rachil. thought youd spelt yer ain name wrong. whoopsThe Brokendown Barmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13729499535859152598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-86421792724612296232009-08-03T23:38:10.111-10:002009-08-03T23:38:10.111-10:00You're a fine one, TBDBM, you spelt my name wr...You're a fine one, TBDBM, you spelt my name wrong, and it can't even be blamed on a typo! Not feeling very special in this end of town - just read the slating you got on your blog, too! V. funny! <br />McGuire, wanted to say bravo for your reserve shown on a not too distant blog :) And when do we get another poem? I keep coming back, wondering if me thingy majiggum isn't working!Rachel Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10046917627054462214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-9952799877151939482009-07-31T01:52:14.599-10:002009-07-31T01:52:14.599-10:00sorry rachael, did i ruin the moment?sorry rachael, did i ruin the moment?The Brokendown Barmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13729499535859152598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-50177942689860574042009-07-29T15:33:38.567-10:002009-07-29T15:33:38.567-10:00Awe, and I thought 'I'll be reading you...Awe, and I thought 'I'll be reading you' was just for me!<br />Now, where's that poem I'm looking for...?Rachel Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10046917627054462214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-74893561270230616702009-07-28T01:34:03.436-10:002009-07-28T01:34:03.436-10:00first of all i have to say i love the way you say ...first of all i have to say i love the way you say "i'll be reading you" when you get a comment from someone new!! its like a cross between terminator and the prisoner!!<br />anyway, like robert plant, i ramble on!! <br />liked the piece, more like the stuff you were writing when i first started to follow you. <br />nice oneThe Brokendown Barmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13729499535859152598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-24225114026329355052009-07-27T09:31:16.065-10:002009-07-27T09:31:16.065-10:00I like this, as it is, very much indeed.I like this, as it is, very much indeed.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-69808092402607567272009-07-26T01:02:56.712-10:002009-07-26T01:02:56.712-10:00Don't be silly. I loved the suggestion. And I&...Don't be silly. I loved the suggestion. And I'm quite fond of a few typos myself. So don't worry about that. <br /><br />I'll be reading you.McGuirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03095242258892600138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-55001049757473244742009-07-25T16:30:08.002-10:002009-07-25T16:30:08.002-10:00I've given it some more thought, and it's ...I've given it some more thought, and it's probably better without forcing the rhyme. 'theose' is still making me chuckle, btw. I cannot fathom how I got an 'o' in there - it's at the opposite side of the keyboard...I apologise for my silly ramble!Rachel Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10046917627054462214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-52799979546186939132009-07-24T00:18:47.475-10:002009-07-24T00:18:47.475-10:00Jeez, so many typos, lol!
I do think restructing t...Jeez, so many typos, lol!<br />I do think restructing theos would be a grand idea to make use of ryme (hahaha), but hey, if you're happy with it, it's fine by me.Rachel Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10046917627054462214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-39698940705913721852009-07-23T22:20:11.172-10:002009-07-23T22:20:11.172-10:00Hello Rachel,
Glad to meet you. Glad you found t...Hello Rachel, <br /><br />Glad to meet you. Glad you found this. You see, I never really go for rhyme, perhaps I should have in this one. Perhaps it is a weakness that I chose not to bother with it. What do you think? <br /><br />I might try restructing it.McGuirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03095242258892600138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-88054531197186977172009-07-23T13:17:50.221-10:002009-07-23T13:17:50.221-10:00What I find interesting is that there's a lot ...What I find interesting is that there's a lot of near ryme/alliteration that you could make stronger use of by re-structuring...'coughs' and 'cloth'...'miss' and 'dress' and 'unimpressed'..I'd have to make a song and dance of theose if I'd written this...(good job I didn't then, eh)! I like it though..found you via Jim..Rachel Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10046917627054462214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-73011105379044234792009-07-23T03:07:06.340-10:002009-07-23T03:07:06.340-10:00Yes, the table cloth is the dress. I don't thi...Yes, the table cloth is the dress. I don't think there is much to get, it's a comic scene, nothing more, perhaps it's not even that funny. <br /><br />I just liked the idea of smoking causing a comedy of erros, much like when you drop a piece of toast into your tea and then knock over the milk or something. <br /><br />More capturing a comic moment than anything poetic or insightful.McGuirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03095242258892600138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-65938917476193181182009-07-22T23:09:33.345-10:002009-07-22T23:09:33.345-10:00I like the way you've anthropomorphised the ci...I like the way you've anthropomorphised the cigarette, the coffee, the table and the chairs but I'm not sure I <i>get</i> the piece. I feel I'm missing some important details, specifically who owns the dress. Or is the 'dress' the 'table cloth'?Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.com