tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post887793270154828266..comments2023-12-19T00:27:40.453-10:00Comments on .: The Old BoyMcGuirehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03095242258892600138noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-31635578466427683212009-01-04T08:35:00.000-10:002009-01-04T08:35:00.000-10:00The punctuation spoiled it for you? - What went wr...The punctuation spoiled it for you? - What went wrong? Too many commas? <BR/>I'll have a re-read. <BR/><BR/>Thanks for reading <BR/><BR/>(p.s. will be commenting on your surrealist essay, just not had the time to put forward an informed reponse yet. I'll be there soon with that one.)McGuirehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03095242258892600138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-30567906.post-68153493581459563942009-01-04T01:52:00.000-10:002009-01-04T01:52:00.000-10:00Nothing great to say about this one other than the...Nothing great to say about this one other than the punctuation spoiled it for me. And it's '<I>too</I> loud'. Sort out the sentences and I think you've got a winner here.Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.com