Sunday, January 17, 2010

High brow.

The rain pisses down from the sky.
Swollen clouds amass like armies.
They have the look of two large
scholarly grey eyebrows crowding
into a frown of disappointment.


Jim Murdoch said...

Nicely observed although 'urinates' seems out of place. Why not simply 'pisses'?

McGuire said...

I suppose so. This blog should really be you workshopping me.

Pisses is less wordy than urinates, but really, I quite liked the idea of making it akin to a man or a woman urinating. But pisses does work as the typical idiom of Glasgow rain talk.

Rachel Fox said...

But pish or piss? I thought you might be pishers over there.