Friday, October 10, 2008

So many faces I can pull

So many faces I can pull,
like Mr Sad and Mr Cool.

On Sunday's young boy Halo
On Monday's old man gloom.

And on occasion Mr Angry
concedes that he loves Mr fool.

Cause we're all in this together,
all the faces I can pull.

But most of all I love Mr Big Laugh
And sincere, Mr Wink-if-it's-True.

*This is definitely one for the kids book.


Jim Murdoch said...

Yes, why not? A nursery rhyme based around smileys! It's a great idea. I've not heard a new nursery rhyme in yonks and I think they're important - they're the first poetry our kids get presented with.

I think your rhythmic structure limps a bit and I'd have another go at this so that really sings. That said my wife likes it as it stands.

McGuire said...

The rhythm is aa bit limp. I sat reading it through a good few time on saturday and there are two or three errors, in fact, I could probably elaborate and add in more smiles.

Glad your wife likes it as it stands.

Dua said...

Thanks great posst